Day 5 — First and Third

Assignment:  Look at the children in the picture below.  Imagine you are one of them and write a paragraph or two in the first person.  Layman’s terms, write the paragraph as if you are the child speaking.  Re-write the paragraph in the third person; write it about the same child.

(I struggled all day long to write this from a child’s point of view.  I instead wrote from the photographer’s point of view.)

(photo courtesy of Beaverton Historical Society)

First Person:

The mound in the corner caught my eye.  On second glance, I realized that they were children, alone in the bus depot.  Compassion rained from my eyes, the dam I’d been struggling to hold back had burst.  It took everything within me to hold back from smothering them in my arms.  From a brief chat with the bus driver, I learned of their story.  Orphaned a month before, a distant relative had stepped in long enough to keep their pittance of an inheritance and send them off to this unknown little town.  These 6 weary eyes showed pain and hurt so deep that I just couldn’t leave them there.  I found myself stepping forward and offering them a hot meal and a warm, cozy place to stay for awhile, if not forever.  Grubby hands clasped tight, the children followed me from the depot.

I asked them if chicken fingers and fries would be a welcoming meal.  Three pairs of eyes flickered at the same time.  Once their tummies were full, a long, hot bath for each of them would be required.  Our first stop, though, would be ice cream.  As we strolled along the boardwalk, I heard that magical tinkle.  The boy giggled.  It was contagious, as soon his companions were all giggling, then laughing.  I could only join with them in their delight.  Pulling out my camera, I stopped and turn.  I needed to capture this moment now, freeze it for all time.  It was unbelievable that these were the same children I first met in the bus station only moments before.  They were smiling.

Third Person:

Rushing through the bus depot, the woman almost missed the mound in the corner.  As her steps slowed, she realized that it was something, but three someones.  Children were huddled together, and seemingly alone.  She approached a bus driver.  The children’s sad story came out.  They were orphaned, then robbed of their meager inheritance by a relative.  His only concern was to distance himself from them even further, and he sent them away.  The woman approached the children, with hope that they wouldn’t be frightened anymore.  For some unexplainable reason, she found her heart warming up to the children.  These nameless faces had already impacted her soul.  She offered them a food and shelter, at least for awhile, if not forever.  With grubby hands clasped tight, the children followed the woman from the depot.

The woman promised chicken fingers and fries for their evening meal.  The children’s eyes all flickered at the same time with expectancy.  Once their tummies were full, long hot baths would be in order.  The first stop, however, was the ice cream parlor.  Strolling along the boardwalk, the woman heard a magical tinkle.  The boy giggle.  It was contagious; soon his companions were all giggling, then laughing.  The woman was drawn into their delight too.  She pulled out her camera, wanting to capture this moment forever.  She could hardly believe that these were the same children she’d met only moments before.  They were smiling.

Day 4 — A Sense of Tense

Assignment:  Write a few sentences about anything, in the present tense.  Then change the tenses to past & future.

(This was some tricky business today!  What a great exercise though; it really stretched my brain)

Present:
The bowl sits empty, clean for its guests.  The invitees promise to arrive on time.  Butter and sugar first.  They cream together, becoming one substance.  Eggs work their way into the fray, one at a time.  Vanilla pops in just long enough to add flavour.  Baking powder and salt sneak in the back door, blending in unnoticed.  Always the life of the party, all purposeful flour is the latecomer.  The beater leads things; they dance as one.   Looking for a break, the party moves into the fridge to chill.  Rest is needed in anticipation of the next step.
Past Tense:
The bowl sat empty, cleaned out for its guests.  The invitees had all promised to arrive on time.  Butter and sugar were first.  They creamed together and became one substance.  Eggs worked their way into the fray, one at a time.  Vanilla popped in just long enough, added flavour and left.  Baking powder and salt snuck in the back door, blended in unnoticed.  Always the life of the party, all purposeful flour was the latecomer.  The beater led things; they danced as one.  Looking for a break, the party moved into the fridge to chill.  Rest was needed as they anticipated the next step.
Future Tense:
The bowl will sit empty, all clean for its guests.  The invitees hope to arrive on time.  Butter and sugar should come first.  They will cream together, becoming one substance.  Eggs will work their way into the fray, one at a time.  Vanilla may pop in briefly, long enough to add flavour.  Baking powder and salt may attempt to sneak in the back door, trying to blend in unnoticed.  I’ll bet that flour will arrive late; its purpose will be to liven up the party.  The beater will play dance leader.  The guests will need a break, plan to move into the fridge to chill.  Take a rest in anticipation of the next step.

Day 3 — Extrapolate

Assignment:  Write about the photograph below.  Pick something in the picture and write about it.  Use descriptive words, etc.  The point of today is to focus.  Extrapolate.  Give me the details because I want to know!

(photo courtesy of Mr. ThinkTank)

Why people frown at rain is beyond me.  I agree: wetness and humidity don’t mix.  And yes, it’s hard keeping yourself looking just snazzy when it’s pouring buckets out.  Looks aside, rain is so soothing.  It’s clear, it’s cleansing, it’s calming.  Headed uphill to find a particular boutique, I was suddenly grateful for the rain.  Sidewalks were slicks.  Puddles were lying in wait of an unsuspecting stepper.  If I didn’t want to slip or get my legs soaked, I’d have to walk slower than usual. Rather than grumble at this development, I chose to embrace the lighter pace.  There was a peace in the air, with the rainfall having just ended and before everyone started rushing outdoors again.  The streets were void of people; barely any traffic.  What a serene time to be outside.  I must remember to always do my errands at this time of day.

I paused.  Took a quick peek around, but still didn’t see anyone.  If there were people watching the lady on the sidewalk from inside their houses, I couldn’t see them anyways.  Closing my eyes tight, I slowly brought my arms up, stretching them out on either side of my body.  From as deep down as I could, I inhaled.  It felt as though I was trying my best to intake the entire scene in one breath.  Silence, dampness, calmness.  I released that breath and inhaled a second time, even deeper than the first.

A smile came to my face.  I turned to look up to the sky.  Thank you, God, for life.  I felt like shouting.  Giggles started up instead, evolving into laughter.  On a lonely residential road, mid-morning, I was experiencing a different realm of peace.

Drip.  Drop.  The rain started it’s trickle downwards.  In the blink of an eye, the bloated clouds opened up and relieved themselves.  Pulling up my hood, I continued on my journey.  I named each drop that hit my head as a different blessing.  God was speaking to me through the rain.  I was all ears.

Day 2 — When Boring Can be a Good Thing

Assignment:  Write a paragraph or two, about the equivalent of a blog post, so we’re talking around 300 words.  It can be about anything you want.  Then save it where you won’t lose it.  Ideally, I’d love for you to post it on Facebook, but I understand if you don’t want to.   Later, at the end of this series we’re going to look at it again and make it better, but you can’t improve on writing that has yet to be written, so get to it!

Here I go:

I’m not sure which was louder; my sigh or the closing of the elevator door.  I wished I was still in my bed, eyes closed and head stuck far away in dreamland.  Not the case this morning.  With each floor I passed, I was descending from my higher realm of pleasant to the lower level of reality.  Oh, I wasn’t really in a foul mood.  At least not yet.  And I was planning to be, at the very least, civil to all people who crossed my path today.  But I just had this strange, foreboding feeling that I should’ve stayed up in my apartment today.  I jumped up and down a few times, hoping to shake it off.  Perhaps I should say a prayer?  Then I realized that something was indeed off.  The floor counter hovered between one & two.  The elevator wasn’t moving.  Oh no, I’m stuck!

Day 1 — The Dog Made Me Angry

Today’s assignment:  Write five nondescript sentences.  Look at them again and re-write them to show and not tell what was happening.  Go over them one last time and pump them full of interesting and descriptive words to really drive your point home!

Here I go…

  1. The computer is slow.
  2. It’s a sunny day.
  3. I need contact lenses.
  4. I drink tea.
  5. My winter jacket is not the warmest.

  1. As the website was loading, I was able to start the washing machine and unload the dishwasher.  It was finished just after I sat down.
  2. I awoke to bright blue skies and the warmth of the sun.  
  3. I quickly pulled my head away, avoiding contact, as my baby’s hands reached out for my glasses.
  4. While the water started to boil, I pulled out my favourite mug and went to choose a tea bag.
  5. I pile on extra layers before I put on my jacket.  I wish I could just pull out my jacket and run out the door like they do on tv.

  1. I pulled up my faster browser and clicked on my favourite news bookmark.  “This is crazy,” I thought to myself as the page began to load.  I left the loading page and ran to turn on the pre-loaded washing machine.  From the laundry room, I jogged into the kitchen and unloaded half-empty dishwasher.  Believing the webpage had loaded, I returned to the computer.  After I sat down, it was readable.
  2. The house felt warm, hot even though it’s still winter.  I dressed thinking it was warm outside.  As I opened the door to step outside, I couldn’t see.  The glaring sun made me squint, my eyes only the smallest of slits.  Time to find a cute pair of sunglasses for myself.
  3. I put hung up the glass cloth, smiling at the clean view in front of my face.  Nothing beats clean eyeglasses.  The baby reached up to me, needing some snuggle time.  She started to giggle and reach out for my face.  Oh no you don’t, I thought, and jerked my head back.  You’re not grabbing my glasses again today.  I really need to get some contact lenses, I sighed to myself.  
  4. In the mood for a hot, soothing drink, I put some water on to boil.  Grabbing my favourite tall mug, I opened the pantry and weighed my options.  I still wasn’t sure which flavour to grab first.  I reached for the sugar.  My tea always needs to be sweetened.  Now for the harder question, herbal or rooibos?
  5. I knew it was cold outside.  I had fully looked up the weather conditions before venturing outdoors.  The added windchill factor on top of the cold temperature should’ve been hint enough.  Yet, I figured I could get away with the shorter jacket instead of my cozy, warm long coat.  I was quickly running to the store for a couple of things.  I was sitting on a heated seat in my hot car.  Why was I still shivering?

My First Challenge

Allume (formerly Relevant Conference) is hosting a series for the month of March.  I’ll be joining in for their “31 days to a better writer” series.  The main goal is that my writing should improvement over the next month (and onwards).

#BetterWriter

Today’s question:  what do I write?

At the moment, it’s more real life stuff.  I help with invitations, emails, church bulletin announcements.  I blog on my other site about life lessons, faith and family.  I also help my friends & family with whatever editing assistance they may need.  I’m trying to refocus my time so that I can just write whatever God has impressed upon my heart as well.